10/22/2010

#YAspooktacular Story Two: A Soul Laid Bare Part One

We are SUPER excited to be taking part in the YA Spooktacular hosted by onceuponareview.com & frenzyofnoise.blogspot.com.  This will be 7 fun filled days with 2 great stories and TONS of prizes!!!

And here's how it works.  There are 2 spooky YA stories being told in 13 parts.  Each part is written by a different author (some currently published, some aspiring) and posted on a different blog.   At the end of each story, you will have a chance to enter to win a prize pack (there is one for each story and a separate one that's open internationally).  To be eligible to win that story's prize pack, you must comment on each part of the story.  There will also be Trick or Treats along the way for more chances to win!  For all the rules, the full rundown of all the goodness as well as a list of all the story stops, click HERE.   

And now to the story!!!


A Soul Laid Bare Part One by Mona Enderili

Tonya slammed the car door with her hip. The stack of library books in her arms started to slide. She shifted and juggled, but they hit the ground with a sickening thud. She swore loudly then stooped to pick them up.
Damn him. It’s all his fault.

He was the reason she’d checked them out – to see what he’d found so interesting. They were old musty tomes on witchcraft and vampire lore. The pages were yellowed and torn, the covers ripped and the cover text barely readable.

The books deserved respectful, careful handling – better than what they received from her. Thoughts of magical retribution skittered through her mind, but she immediately dismissed them. She didn’t believe in magic; she was too practical for that. If she did, she might worry.

The man was there again today. She snuck through the door, trying to blend in as she moved. He probably wasn’t looking for her but he was waiting for someone. Twice a week for the past six weeks, the intense, serious man about her age had come to the library, always sitting at the table farthest from the door. He wasn’t handsome in the classic sense, but his face showed character, strength. And his eyes drew her in. So dark - almost black - they seemed to burn right through to her soul. She shivered just thinking about them.
“He’s here again,” the older woman said. She looked up from the computer at Tonya. “What does he want?”

Tonya shrugged.

She was going to talk to him this morning, maybe invite him to a Halloween party. She worked up the nerve over the last few weeks, but this morning on her way to work, she’d spilled coffee on her blouse over her right breast. She’d wiped at it furiously and only succeeded in spreading the stain. She wasn’t going to talk to him today—she’d only ventured out of the office with a book large enough to hold inconspicuously over her chest.

“I’m going to lunch,” the old woman said. “Someone needs to find out what he wants.”

Tonya knew she was the someone. She took a gulp and walked toward him, not even grabbing a book to shield her stain. She glanced toward his table and she sucked in her breath. He was staring so hard in her direction there were tiny creases between his brows, and his eyes were narrow slits. Power rolled off him in palpable waves.

She’d glanced around to see if he might be looking at someone else, but everyone had left and she was alone with him.

Completely, totally alone.

Her mouth went dry and she swallowed hard.


To keep reading, head on over to FallenArchangel for Part 2
(posted now!)


FrenzyofNoise is the start of story 1, Darkness, 
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43 Feedback:

  1. That's a fun start! Dark mysterious boys are always the best, until they try to kill you...

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  2. Ooh, this is a very different beginning from the other story! I like the intrigue, and the description of this guy. I'm a little confused about why we'd need to know "what he wants..." isn't he allowed to go to the library? But I'm excited to see what sparks will fly!

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  3. Wonderful start Mona! Very different from the other story, and I think that's awesome! I'm a sucker for the dark and mysterious boys myself:)

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  4. OK this sounds very intriguing! I love that you feel drawn in for the first sentence!

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  5. This looks like such an interesting story! I'll definitely continue reading!

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  6. Intriguing indeed! Very awesome!

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  7. You've got me. This is great!

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  8. I'm with Ariane...and question why everyone needs to know what this guy is doing in the library. Its a public place after all. I'd rather be shown and not told that there is something about him.

    Interesting start though...curious to see what happens in Part 2.

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  9. I like the beginning! Am moving on to part two now :) Gahh a trick! I haven't had a costume in years... maybe I'll still fit the one I had 4 years ago?

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  10. great start! i'm hooked! i'm definitely curious about this "mysterious" guy

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  11. Very true about the fact that he should be allowed to be there, since it is a public space. It's probably more the fact that he comes there at specific intervals, plus this specific quality about him.

    Great start! I already love it since it's library based. =)

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  12. This story is a page-turner. I can't wait to read what happens next.

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  13. Great start Mona! :) I'll be reading more...

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  14. This is such a fun idea! I have to know what this man wanted with Tonya.

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  15. Great start to this story! Can't wait for more!

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  16. I am guessing now that he is some sort of an incubus... Guess I'll have to read more and see!

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  17. I like the start to this one. It's completely different from the start to Darkness, yet I'm wholly intrigued. I'm off to read part two :D

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  18. This is a good start. I don't know what this guys deal is, but I started imagining him as a younger version of Giles from Buffy.

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  19. great start, I wonder what he wants with her.

    jlynettes @ hotmail . com

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  20. love how you show the darkness in the depths of his eyes drawing her in, how mysterious he is and yet he seems particularly interested in her.

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  21. Great beginning! I love stories at the library! =)

    milagp1@yahoo.com.br

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  22. This really is a very interesting start, I can't wait to see some interaction!

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  23. so far im loven it cant wait tor ead whats next


    an di havent had a costume inc ei was 12so along time ago

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  24. Wow, that's really interesting! :O I can't wait to see how the guy is. Mysterious~

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  25. Awesome start. Is the guy dangerous? I'm hooked!

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  26. Beware the tall, dark stranger. Waiting behind the stacks.

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  27. Great start. Cant wait to find out what he wants.

    bacchus76 at myself dot com

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  28. okay, you have my attention, Hope I don't miss any parts. (MSNKSU90(at)ATT(dot)NET)

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  29. Very mysterious! Looking forward to more!

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  30. Interesting characters! Can't wait to read more!*_*

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  31. I like it staring at a library. Can't wiat to read the next installment.

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  32. I really like the way that this story was stated. Right away it had my interest and even though it was only a short part I found myself getting into it. I'm looking forward to read the next part as this one left of at a bit of a cliffhanger.

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  33. I love the start!! I always love the dark brooding male character!

    Kristen
    My Bloody Fairy Tale

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  34. It's a good start! I can't wait to see what he wants.

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  35. I loved the start sounds like it will be good. I wonder what he wants with her!

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  36. What a fun way to celebrate Halloween! Great start, can't wait for the rest of the story.

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  37. I love the start! Curious to see what happens in Part 2.

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  38. Great start. I want to read more!

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  39. What a great start! Can't wait for more :)

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  40. Nifters... I wonder what happens next?

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